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The Prophecy by ~blizpix:iconblizpix:

Categories Literature > Poetry > Old Poetry Structure > Rhymes




Flames of fire, fire of rage

Count the stars, try you may

Only the most powerful mage

One of evil, ‘DarkMage’ they say



Water of magic, water of light

Flow so freely, float so high

Cure the plague, destroy the blight

Old become new, dawn to nigh



Rock of ancient, rock of old

Two daughters, twins, the father unknown

Both miracles and horrors did unfold

One child of ivory, the other brimstone



Goddess of Life, Goddess of Death

One of Heaven, One of Hell

They fought to their last dying breath

An eternal sleep in which they fell...
©2003-2009 ~blizpix
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Author's Comments

I wrote this in 6th grade for a trilogy I was working on then (The Resurrector). It just kinda popped in my brain. Its confusing, don't worry about that. I hope you enjoy it.

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~Shadowmagegrl Nov 14, 2003, 2:50:21 PM
Beauteous poem! I love the way you write. . .
Pic is good, too- the hair rocks :D

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~tangerine-dragon Nov 17, 2003, 8:51:50 AM
I love this poem. It's so fantastical! :D You rock.

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Reality is not where your body is, but where your mind is... be it on paper or in dreams.

:orange: Tangerine Dragon :orange:
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~sophyX Nov 19, 2003, 5:57:13 AM
OMG! I love this poem! it's beautiful! I litteraly love it. it's confusing, and without sens and meaningful at the same time... WOAW! I just love it!
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~Xianthe Nov 21, 2003, 1:50:10 PM
fantasmagorical!!


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read mine!
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~ArmorFelix2001 Nov 22, 2003, 11:16:33 AM
*Cracks knuckles* ah, this is something I can critique, well sort of:)

The syllable scheme isn't completely right in the second passage, and the poem is a bit simple, but it does flow well, and is fairly colorful.

"Rock of ancient, rock of old
Two daughters, twins, the father unknown
Both miracles and horrors did unfold
One child of ivory, the other brimstone"

This is your strongest visual I think:)

It's pretty solid as poetry goes, I can't find much wrong with it, its kind of like the reliable girl versus a bombshell at the pagent, it eworks for you but it won't win any prizes.

but for 6th grade, that's pretty good....I was writing jack squat back then...
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~blizpix Nov 22, 2003, 11:45:31 AM
Thank you, it honestly was just supposed to be a little companion poem for my story, so its not as good as some of my other stuff. I haven't posted any other poems though so I can't prove it.

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Never insult an artist with a sharpened pencil in her hand...
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`wernstrum Nov 22, 2003, 2:06:39 PM
for a 6th grade poem that was very neat. good job :)

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Waste not want not
-- The Mask
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~Jellygraph Nov 22, 2003, 4:46:23 PM
I like this. Especially the line "One child of ivory, the other brimstone." Great imagery.
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~FieryRavenOfPoi Nov 28, 2003, 1:46:10 AM
Very good... The first poem in ages that I like: o)

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There is always a light at the end of a chain...

Have You Ever Seen A RaveN With Feathers On Fire?
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